The Candle Burns

[MikeNL]

You know that very Rev. no. 9 like song, the candle burns?

i rerecorded it:
www.zshare.net/audio/8988040743deb8/

i hope you guys like it! please tell me what you think

[MikeNL]

nobody likes it i guess i'll remove it tomorrow

[B]

I like it a lot better than the original. Some lines sank into the orchestration, though.

www.earcandymag.com/beatles-peaceofmind.htm

Peace Of Mind/Candle Burns”

I’m looking at the candle,
burns a flame too near the sky.
(I weave?) the candle laughing,
I turn my face to cry.
A safety pin returns my smile,
I nod and greet “Hello”,
While you are building molecules
with your garden hoe.

Why could this last forever?
These things repressed inside.
One feels it almost instantly,
unless the novice die.
It’s over, it’s done, (taper meeting?) again.
Just please, please, please,
oh, don’t keep me from begin.

I need to hear the colours red and blue,
and whispered word.
To fly all day, and sing in tune
and not hear what I’ve read(/heard).
To see you all around me
and to take you by the hand.
And lead you to a brand new world
that lately has been banned.

We’ll build things never built before.
We’ll do things never done.
And just before it’s over,
it’s really just begun.

[MikeNL]

letterb1 said:

I like it a lot better than the original. Some lines sank into the orchestration, though.

www.earcandymag.com/beatles-peaceofmind.htm

thank you!