My Paul is dead short story- finally finished!

[jerriwillmore]

I've been working on this for four years..

www.geocities.com/colouringpurple/paul.html

[B]

Thanks for posting this. I will be reading it later this evening. Best wishes.

update: I will comment tomorrow.

[B]

I'm about 1/4 the way through. Every time I get started on it, the phone rings,
or the cats get in a fight, etc. Tonight I have to go to my sister's.
I will get to it as soon as possible! I like it so far.

[JoJo]

I forgot where I left off two years ago.. but it was still enjoyable. Liked how you worked in some of the stuff that's been talked about here, such as the "friend of the Beatles" who told that friend of Linda's that Paul had been replaced. (NY Times story)

Good job.

[iameye]

I haven't read the whole thing, but:
you wrote:
"Then his jawbone was operated on. They replaced the left one with a plate made out of titanium. "

Maybe you could say left side of his jaw bone. Just a minor little thing, as it's really just one bone.

I also thought the bar conversation was a tiny bit stiff, and maybe you could have beefed up the brogue aspect, since you mention it, in a non trite way.

Hey, I read a lot, ya know?
Just giving the critical side ;D

[jerriwillmore]

Cool thanks all.

[B]

Aaargh! I didn't have a chance to get to it today at all, and tomorrow being Halloween
means I probably won't have much time to get to it tomorrow,
but I promise I will read the whole story, and comment soon.

[Deleted]

wow, really well done. everything just wove together. great job, man!

[jerriwillmore]

Kool.